In a sudden frenzy of sleepI don't have much to say about this one. It's based on a dream and it's more successful than most dream poems, I think, because it's based on someone else's dream. In fact, it's all about statements the dreamer has made to me (the narrator).
you saw a parade of ex-girlfriends,
fat, and getting heavier.
Embarassed ever to have felt
toward something so gone,
you didn't introduce me.
I'm handling the introductions.
We took up the weightlessness of bicycles
and have become, as you would say,
I know because you said
you would rather be young
in here, with me,
than old, outside, alone.
I think the narrator starts displaying skepticism towards the dreamers utterances at that middle part (Sit back...). I like to think that stanza has some special meaning in the poem, since it sticks out so much in tone and rhythm. (Speaking of rhythm, I basically just made up the punctuation in an attempt to recreate the dramatic way I read it.) The statement in the last stanza isn't actually a tautology, but that word seems to capture the way it's almost meaningless because so obviously, a priori, true.
This one was considered for publication in the Brown undergrad literary journal at the same time as Untitled. I got to listen anonymously to the debate and, if I remember correctly, this one won out because it was considered more interesting, unusual and difficult to do things with weight than with colors.